Application bachelor work

I wьrde happy if you give wьrdet Verbesserungsvorschlдge to my letter to me:

Application closed for a bachelor’s thesis November 2013

Dear Mr. XXXXXX,

with groЯem interest I studied the website of XXXXX AG. I am very pleased that your company offers the Mцglichkeit to prepare essay writing service a Bachelor thesis. Therefore, I apply to you hereby closed for the creation of a Bachelor thesis November, 2013.

I am studying https://writingbee.com/ Information Engineering with the deepening of energy engineering at the XXXX XXXXXX. Currently I am in internship at the XXXXXXX GmbH.

My main interests lie in the power generation and Energieьbertragung. Both areas the XXXX AG covers fortunately, which is why I want to settle my undergraduate work in one of these two areas.

I verfьge In the field of energy technology informed about practical knowledge that I have gained through my training as an electronics technician closed for energy and Gebдudetechnik and by subsequent Berufstдtigkeiten as a skilled worker.
Sound Theoretical knowledge I have gained through my studies. So I have the major study “Energy Technology” “Excellent” with a score and passed the major subject “Renewable energy technology” with a grade of “good”.
Wдhrend my practical semester at derXXXXXXX GmbH I have gained experience in project planning of combined Wдrme and power plants (CHP) and construction of photovoltaic systems.
Darьber, I have in-depth IT Kenntisse. I am an assistant in recruiting the YYYYYYYYY GmbH in XXXXXXX. There I edit correspondence with kkkkkkk, nursing a Datensдtze and build computer Arbeitsplдtze.

In addition, I am very interested in energy policy and therefore betдtige me since early 2010 volunteer in CCCCCC group HHHHH as Ag contact and youth workers.

Looking forward to your positive response.

Yours GrьЯen
Patrick XXXXXX

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Ruhr Tramp
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Posted: 12 June 2013 – 07:37:52 Title:
Hello PatrickHH,

because young academics rarely been informed about verfьgen profound experience, the motivation is the decisive argument. Only missing from this point nor the nцtige significance.
A Aussae as “My main interests lie in the power generation and Energieьbertragung” is too general. The significance of winning the whole thing rather when concretized his interest and begrьndet. Only then a reader can understand that the interest is tatsдchlich mean it.

And the writing style reads “gewцhnlich”; factually-nьchtern – without dynamism and pizzazz. Just as you have to produce at a detective voltage, should also be informed about the writing style, try to win the attention of a recruiter. The more dynamic the style, the easier it becomes to spьren also the applicant’s motivation closed for him.

Many GrьЯe from Duisburg

maze77
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Posted: 12 Jun 2013 to 20: 07:38 Title:
Hello PatrickHH,

The first two Sдtze the introduction I find persцnlich meaningless. What exactly made you as interested in? I wьrde the mцglichst exactly specified.

It also fдllt on that you do not give details about your work. Which question do you want to pursue?

Some notes on spelling:

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I verfьge In the area of energy technology

– “in the” you write here is not great.

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In-depth Theoretical knowledge

– small t wдre better here .

greeting Maze77

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Posted: 17 Jun 2013 to 15: 54:18 Title: Unsolicited Bachelor thesis
Hello user

unsolicited application: Bachelor thesis in the field of IT project management

Dear Sirs,

with groЯem interest I have taken in your website that your company is committed students offers the Mцglichkeit a thesis project.

As a student of the course Application-oriented computer science with the final target BS Since at Ruprecht-Karls-Universitдt Heidelberg I am in the final stages of my studies and now mцchte my date theoretical knowledge gained during the preparation of my bachelor thesis, in your company apply successfully.

My main focus is on IT project management and dazugehцrigen processes. The benцtigten to subject-related lectures, basics of IT project management and software Цkonomie under the direction of Dr. xxxxxx (xxx AG), I attended with very well. Wдhrend my studies I attended in-service courses in these Fдchern. Furthermore, I verfьge informed about basic knowledge of SQL, PHP, C ++ and Java. I
happy wьrde write to you my final paper in IT project management and controlling. Their Vorschlдgen closed for a suitable subject, I am always open gegenьber.

In addition to my knowledge I have by my previous student jobs and valuable experience in the responsible use of customers and others. My professional appearance always find recognition from my superiors. I myself am very motivated to develop myself in this very interesting area of responsibility and look forward, if I may ask you my previous knowledge and my Zuverlдssigkeit to Verfьgung. To my Stдrken I zдhle Teamfдhigkeit, targeted and lцsungsorientiertes action as well as an accurate and clean operation.

I will be happy to introduce you wьrde me in a persцnlichen Gesprдch and remain
Yours GrьЯen

Ruhr Tramp

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Posted: 18 June 2013 – 07:06:15 Title:
Hello Sonne31,

really are you only keep a check punctuation?

Many GrьЯe from Duisburg

Sonne31
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Posted: 18 June 2013 – 11: 57:55 Title:
Yes, but closed for’m also open closed for criticism
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Posted: 18 June 2013 – 12: 16:04 Title:
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Ruhr Tramp

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Posted: 20 June 2013 – 07:38:12 Title:
Hello Sonne31,

initiation is not exactly aussagekrдftig and erhдlt only Selbstverstдndliches. Because if someone is applying, one can expect a more or less groЯes interest. Or do you know someone who is also applying for a position that he finds uninteresting?

In applications should as a candidate carefully avoid the subjunctive. For HR managers who are zustдndig indeed closed for the issuing of certificates are used to “legal language” to think of it. Closed for it applies the subjunctive as a sign closed for a lack of self-confidence of the candidate.

With regard to the position to which you are applying, you prдsentierst Although extensive your knowledge. But what about the einschlдgigen professional experience? You did sicherklich also already worked specifically in one or the other project.
A candidate who brings in addition to the theory and practice, is still closed for a company much more interesting.

Finally, you should also a distinct individual related to the company hefrstellen which gives the recruiter a feel of an exclusive application. Apply also means a little to woo the Advertised at least to give him a feel of very much want him. but that’s just only informed about the individual terms.